tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9133489888936435050.post2191115275285514910..comments2024-03-12T18:52:31.920-04:00Comments on Write with Fey: The First Sentence of a BookChrys Feyhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/11955009490266358041noreply@blogger.comBlogger75125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9133489888936435050.post-71717098804990778532016-01-13T16:57:05.233-05:002016-01-13T16:57:05.233-05:00I've always believed that that first sentence ...I've always believed that that first sentence in a book was so important. Great post.BBhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09432729957196570774noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9133489888936435050.post-90338939742299216652016-01-13T12:57:59.917-05:002016-01-13T12:57:59.917-05:00A timeous post.
I'm off now to check the first...A timeous post.<br />I'm off now to check the first sentence of a short I'm contributing to an upcoming anthology.<br /><br />Look at it in this way, a weak opening sentence may just be the reason a potential fan (or agent) passes your story by. You have to nail that first sentence/paragraph!Michelle Wallacehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02750092836481599870noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9133489888936435050.post-84664965807183831142016-01-12T23:26:34.704-05:002016-01-12T23:26:34.704-05:00Whoa! That opener is amazing...flawless. Your pros...Whoa! That opener is amazing...flawless. Your prose is unbelievable.Chrys Feyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11955009490266358041noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9133489888936435050.post-75461869094762373312016-01-12T23:24:40.847-05:002016-01-12T23:24:40.847-05:00Glad you think so.Glad you think so.Chrys Feyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11955009490266358041noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9133489888936435050.post-76226174763548583932016-01-12T18:57:54.231-05:002016-01-12T18:57:54.231-05:00I agree. Nothing like a riveting first sentence or...I agree. Nothing like a riveting first sentence or two. I enjoyed your examples from your novellas. Hooked the reader right away. <br />I am currently working on my first few sentences for a submission. Only came up with this new sequence yesterday so will continue working on it, but it is much better than the passivity of my original...<br /><br />"It happens every morning. That seeping dread. Jolting her feet until they burn from toe to heel, creeping up her limbs like a colony of fire ants, enflaming her throat so she gasps for breath. Finally, it settles like a leaden ball in the pit of her stomach." Denise Covey https://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9133489888936435050.post-1048840777064002682016-01-12T14:28:18.390-05:002016-01-12T14:28:18.390-05:00Excellent point to have made.
Yvonne.Excellent point to have made.<br />Yvonne.nashvillecats2https://www.blogger.com/profile/02326956741209246895noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9133489888936435050.post-78408004189534153182016-01-12T13:53:59.430-05:002016-01-12T13:53:59.430-05:00Also like: She was going to die:)Also like: She was going to die:)Sandra Coxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03814573408898140885noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9133489888936435050.post-78772297172826168112016-01-12T12:25:49.687-05:002016-01-12T12:25:49.687-05:00It's always fun to read things we wrote in hig...It's always fun to read things we wrote in high school. I'm always amazed and then embarrassed. lolChrys Feyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11955009490266358041noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9133489888936435050.post-43883212063351915182016-01-12T12:10:22.772-05:002016-01-12T12:10:22.772-05:00Definitely a death theme. ;)
I don't know tha...Definitely a death theme. ;)<br /><br />I don't know that one from The Poisonwood Bible, but that is an intriguing sentence.Chrys Feyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11955009490266358041noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9133489888936435050.post-71043420938583231962016-01-12T12:09:03.006-05:002016-01-12T12:09:03.006-05:00That is a classic opening. One of my favorites.That is a classic opening. One of my favorites.Chrys Feyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11955009490266358041noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9133489888936435050.post-86470343930079181682016-01-12T12:08:23.697-05:002016-01-12T12:08:23.697-05:00Thank you! :)Thank you! :)Chrys Feyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11955009490266358041noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9133489888936435050.post-13219027431982930962016-01-12T12:08:10.845-05:002016-01-12T12:08:10.845-05:00Far from easy. But we love what we do. :)Far from easy. But we love what we do. :)Chrys Feyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11955009490266358041noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9133489888936435050.post-49307115849286183122016-01-12T12:07:52.926-05:002016-01-12T12:07:52.926-05:00You're welcome! :)You're welcome! :)Chrys Feyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11955009490266358041noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9133489888936435050.post-40873378447358905082016-01-12T11:16:21.891-05:002016-01-12T11:16:21.891-05:00Great advice and examples.Great advice and examples.Romance Book Havenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01268150556737773533noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9133489888936435050.post-25087448415790697222016-01-12T10:22:14.582-05:002016-01-12T10:22:14.582-05:00Thanks. Your timing is perfect. :-)
Anna from el...Thanks. Your timing is perfect. :-)<br /><br /><a href="http://emaginette.wordpress.com" rel="nofollow"> Anna from elements of emaginette</a>emaginettehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03324981140248692448noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9133489888936435050.post-38487047453471044132016-01-12T09:44:42.670-05:002016-01-12T09:44:42.670-05:00Ah the pressure right from the start. It ain't...Ah the pressure right from the start. It ain't easy being a writer. TBMhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12062603677194826834noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9133489888936435050.post-53020656168169760812016-01-12T05:55:03.773-05:002016-01-12T05:55:03.773-05:00I surprised myself a little while ago when I rerea...I surprised myself a little while ago when I reread a piece I'd started writing during high school. The whole first planet was just one line that said:<br /><br />The planet couldn't take it anymore.<br /><br />I found I couldn't put the piece down, although there did end up being some quite cringeworthy parts as well.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09063165966816632456noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9133489888936435050.post-80526390153103511712016-01-12T01:26:00.002-05:002016-01-12T01:26:00.002-05:00Hmm...I'm sensing a death theme. :)
One of my...Hmm...I'm sensing a death theme. :)<br /><br />One of my favourite first sentences was always, "It was the best of times, it was the worst of times."<br /><br />When I saw how atrocious the actual sentence is in its entirety, I was so disappointed. I wish Dickens had stuck to the abridged version.<br /><br />I also love this one, from The Poisonwood Bible:<br /><br />Imagine a ruin so strange it must never have happened. J.H. Moncrieffhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18045467689291025137noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9133489888936435050.post-18828373570090689502016-01-11T21:39:18.973-05:002016-01-11T21:39:18.973-05:00You are so right with that first sentence being ma...You are so right with that first sentence being magical..or at least should be. I love the art you showed especially since it is a female artist. My favourite..."It was the best of time, it was the worst of times...."Birgithttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09439720285857050428noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9133489888936435050.post-13440635917770122232016-01-11T21:21:54.501-05:002016-01-11T21:21:54.501-05:00My first paragraph: The way to the Maroon Room was...My first paragraph: The way to the Maroon Room was clearly marked, so that’s not my excuse. I guess it was curiosity. The Royal Gardens were renowned for their beauty, and it was likely I would not venture into Torindalkeyp again, not after. I figured it would be better if I saw them when I could.Liz A.https://www.blogger.com/profile/16531953467834426316noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9133489888936435050.post-14840933674449979032016-01-11T20:18:26.872-05:002016-01-11T20:18:26.872-05:00I love that one too. ;)I love that one too. ;)Chrys Feyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11955009490266358041noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9133489888936435050.post-13238098398118230642016-01-11T20:14:35.624-05:002016-01-11T20:14:35.624-05:00Great first sentences, Chrys. I especially like: ...Great first sentences, Chrys. I especially like: I'm dead. Sandra Coxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03814573408898140885noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9133489888936435050.post-13359819220781369272016-01-11T20:01:00.518-05:002016-01-11T20:01:00.518-05:00The first pages are definitely the most crucial to...The first pages are definitely the most crucial to get right...and the toughest.Chrys Feyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11955009490266358041noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9133489888936435050.post-38004584865736366232016-01-11T20:00:26.988-05:002016-01-11T20:00:26.988-05:00Hahaha! That made me laugh. I'm glad you liked...Hahaha! That made me laugh. I'm glad you liked the opening for Witch of Death more...I worked on it the most.Chrys Feyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11955009490266358041noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9133489888936435050.post-6772562554568518922016-01-11T19:59:14.860-05:002016-01-11T19:59:14.860-05:00Thanks, Sherry! I'm enjoying the lines others ...Thanks, Sherry! I'm enjoying the lines others are sharing too. :)Chrys Feyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11955009490266358041noreply@blogger.com